If I wrote a love letter to the one I hurt it would say:
My everything, take it.
My precious pottery, the Versace dishes break them.
It can’t compare to the hurt in your heart. The hurt I now feel as I feel everything else because I have declared that you and I…
Are now forever one.
You are my hearts permanent scar. And that’s not enough to show you how much work I’m willing to do for us.
You have given me life’s best gift and then sacrificed life itself. I’m rambling. Sigh
I’m rambling.
What can I say to describe the precious gift of love which you have extended to me and which I constantly disrespect? But I’m determined to do better this time. I’m struggling to breathe because I’m struggling with the unimaginable thought of you leaving me for good.
I believe that when people do wrong and make mistakes it makes them better because that’s all I can afford to think.
You owe me nothing anymore. You owe me no more chances. I’m sure I’ve used up the chances of others as well. Because you gave yourself. You gave your life. As the blood gushed like from a water fountain in an emperors courts, love flowed as red. I feel the shock you felt at the first blow but your love flowed as red for us, for me who didn’t deserve it at all. Your love flowed as red. It flowed as life. It flowed as redemption. It flowed as victory. I feel the happiness with which you said “it is finished”. Your love flowed as red.
I’m here without hopes. At the same time I’m fighting the dread creeping up my spine. Love –even when I don’t deserve to use the word around you- love is patient. Love is kind. Love has no envy. Love does not boast. Love is not proud. It is not rude. It is not self-seeking. Love is not easily angered. Love keeps no record of wrongs. Love does not delight in evil but rejoices with the truth. Love always protects, always trusts, always hopes, always perseveres. And love never ever fails.
I’m not here with rights. But I remember when I used to hope that when you hear my name you will smile and say that is my friend but instead you’d smile and say “that is my future” and when it seemed like you had made up your mind about what I’d always be to you- beautiful. I remember when you never stopped wooing me till I was wooed. Nothing with you was and is like rushing.
Turn your face to me, turn to me your face blushing.
With you I can discuss my hopes, I can pour out my heart. I’m rambling. Sigh
I’m rambling.
But I remember when we first met, you forgave me when I hadn’t forgiven myself. You allowed me look you in the face. To all the love you showed me I have been incomplete, unprepared. Undeserving. They said this didn’t exist in our world, in our generation cursed to faults and epidemics and mass funerals. In you I find my peace and my safe place. But why do I keep hurting you? I grew up believing that here on mother earth people will always hurt you, you can’t choose that but you can choose who hurts you. I was hoping you’d like your choice. It was stupid and I know that now. You don’t have to hurt anybody. And I remember when none of my inadequacies mattered to you it was me you wanted, me you loved. You trusted me and you asked me to love you back like I had other options. And I know now all these years you waited for me to settle my shame you weren’t ashamed of me.
You are mine that God brought to me.
Come on now…come now, get up! Get up from this coffin and let me love you rightly. Get up because you are in the wrong bed. Get up and protect me! Get up
While your blood flowed, it was love I saw, come up quickly before they lower you into the ground forever, people are beginning to stare.
I don’t care.
They don’t know what you mean to me. They don’t know anything. They just enjoy wearing black but then why am I pouring sand over you? Why is a white rose in my hand? Why can I hear from dust to dust? Why am I crying because I will never see your smile again?
A letter to the one I hurt till it was too late.
It’s not too late get up, get up now…
My everything, take it.
96 comments
I read this, and wow.. The way the writer draws biblical allusions (at least as perceived by me) and intertwines it with his (or her) romance story strikes numerous chords in my heart.
Love it, love it, love it.
I love this, I don’t know is it weird that I can totally relate to this?
This is super nice
I just read your piece, its really something, so remarkable.
How did you even come up with something that long and still make it sound good. No one really knows how it feels to lose the person you really love ?.
Well done and well written. ?
Nice write up.it is truly remarkable
This piece shows how blind one can be to their significant others pain even when its staring them in the face. Beautiful.
Ive learnt to look out for others and not take their sacrifices for granted
The write up is really beautiful its complete from when they met to how they finally became friends in a relationship how the guy felt abt her how she did not take him serious then she later discovered or dah she loves him so much, but it was too late
Nice one
Love hurts you shouldn’t take one’s love for granted cause it might end up being late. Thanks for the knowledge Kemi. Interesting piece looking forward to more ?
The complexity and the narrative here are some strong and full of feeling. This piece is written in such a powerful way that it can be interpreted in a bigger or smaller way.
Love the metaphor, and the way the ending really makes you feel something.
Applause to the writer, this is really good.
This is really beautiful and well written, it’s really sad losing one who truly loves you despite one’s imperfection… Woow, looking forward for more piece, keep the good job up.
Love it….really really nice piece kemi,hands down!
It is in this world that we take a lot of things for granted not knowing that one day it would be taken away, thats when we’ll realize how important it was. It has always been from the world go and the fact will always be that you don’t know what you’ve got till loose it. Sometimes it would be too late to make corrections because its gone forever and the scares from the hurt will hunt you forever. Whether the writer had written from experience or formulations, she had just made it clear that it ‘was too late’ and i can’t imagine how long the pains would last but nonetheless, things can be better henceforth. I’m sorry that particular one is gone ???
Wow
Really really enlightening post Kemi,
Well done.. indeed love never fails
Nice piece. It speaks deeply about loosing someone u love and the hurt one feels after such event. Nice one
Love the use of words suggesting how one feels about another, ain’t no other better feeling than that. Awesome/Amazing article
This is lovely, the composition the structure, the grammar, just lovely im really impressed ?….i think a tear dropped from my eye when i was reading this, keep it up kemi, this is not the end.
Wow…am impressed tho,very catching and I love ur biblical approach to it, confusing and yet convincing. Written like a bible scholar and that’s all that matters. Nice piece
I could see the characters come to life… could feel the pain down to my bones! My eye shed a tear as my heart bled! I saw Christ Jesus through your words! I could relate to your story! This is an amazing piece Kemi
What wondrous love is this? What wondrous love this? Only He that is love can fill the human heart with such love. Wow!
For each time we lose someone, a friendship etc, a part of us is lost. We die almost a thousand times.
There is so much to draw out of this.
Drawing simply from the death part, I imagine God as the One losing here. Sin separated us from Him and one is bound to die, to be eternally separated from Him and for each first death His heart ‘bleeds.’ And what about the second? In all our afflictions, He is afflicted.
Your piece has just made me very pensive. Good dose for the day. I shall be thinking all day on this, at least most of it.
“I believe that when people do wrong and make mistakes it makes them better because that’s all I can afford to think” To err is human but to forgive is divine, it’s never too late to forgive and give a fresh start.
Wonderful piece.
Truth be told, this is nice. ??
Awww this is good it’s very touching had to read it again it’s deep
Wonderful
Really lovely ????
This is a deep masterpiece. ✌✌✌
This is great insight at work. I can see the writer draw up from the greatest love story ever ( between God and man) and impute it into a scenario that can happen to any one of us. Really great imagination.
Wow. Kemi kekere. This is…heart wrenching. I actually almost shed a tear. And i never cry. The finality of death will do that to you. Lovely stuff. I’m proud
This is beautiful.. I love this… It’s marvelous…
It has opened my eyes and heart
“But I remember when we first met, you forgave me when I hadn’t forgiven myself. You allowed me look you in the face. To all the love you showed me I have been incomplete, unprepared. Undeserving.”
This part reminds me of the love Jesus has for us. He loved us before we knew him and He continues to love us even when we don’t deserve it.
Way to go girl!
wow i really needed this thanks alot it has made me look at things in a different perspective.
Nice write up Kemi. This is really inspiring.
This is really good. Never knew Kemi could write.
Keep it up darling
It was encapsulating from beginning till ending.
You gave your life. As the blood gushed like from a water fountain in an emperors courts, love flowed as red.
These are my best lines. The writer draws real lines with beautiful descriptives. If these are the words for the hurt, I wonder what the writer would have written for the love. Intense I must say.
You have always had a good way with words. But this is amazing!!
Now if the whole world could share in this pain wouldn’t the world be so much better? The dept of feeling conjured by the piece is such that I felt like I was the one in it. I actually cried a little
Wonderfully crafted, really deep narrative, i am really impressed…i see myself reciting this someday…Great Job
This teaches that we’re not promised tomorrow
really nice
You become a good writer when you do continuous reading of other intellectual’ piece. KEMI is an avid reader. So she’s got this. More grease dearest
This story has more than gripping suspense. It has a magic that made the plot come alive. I could hear the rhythm of pain and loss pulsating in every line. I don’t know how Kemi did it but whatever she did left my heart racing!
Great piece. Glad I read it
Beautifully put together weldone
Nice write up Kemi,
This is an amazing write up lots of lessons lots of suspense
This is amazing!!!
Using words to explain love like this is something I hardly see, has me thinking about love all over again. Tremendous write up kemi. Keep up with the good work
I wish I could meet with this writer personally cos I feel she has a lot of things to inform me. This is very beautiful. God bless
Nice write up
Wow… Lovely piece. Totally relate-able dnt under-appreciate efforts amd sacrifices of others… ALOFE, you are amazing
Very very interesting post. Love definitely never fails. This was educative and true. Nice job Kemi!!
Beautiful and innovative, we need more of this coming.???
Nice one I felt connected to the poem
Kemi I love it
So much in one piece… Love…
“… You are my hearts permanent scar. And that’s not enough to show you how much work I’m willing to do for us.
You have given me life’s best gift and then sacrificed life itself. I’m rambling. Sigh… ”
This is just pure talent, passion ad everything in one piece… This is beautiful ?… I’m expectant of more of dis
Wow! What can I say? This is pure art and pure creativity. Emphasizes on mistakes most people make by waiting for so long to realize and make ammends for their wrong doings there by losing things or people so dear to us all because it is a little too late.
It’s strengthening to read abt somtin similar Ur goin tru. Lyf has its necessities som tinz must take place, pple wud get broken hearted buh wat matters must is wat u learnt frm Ur mistake so Ur next move is not a regret. Pple live on and die to dos alive let’s live life to the fullest wif no regrets. Love ursef in every situation, we lose those we love and we met those who love us beta
Bravo kemi!!!!its an amazing piece.i really like that biblical concept you used that teaches us the qualities of real love.keep it up dear.
Nice
Wow, really lovely. I couldn’t just tear my eyes away as I began to read. It was like the piece had held me spell bound to the wonders it kept showcasing. From the very first word to the last I held my breath until the final sentence was I able to really breath. Thank u Kemi for sharing a part of yourself with me.
impressive ~thumps up~
This is really really good Kemi… Awesome.
This shows that love comes in different ways pain,
The allusion to the bible
Out and we should respect love
This has me falling in love all of again and appreciating it better than I ever had. Lovely write up. Keep up the good work
Being able to cope and overcome the pain of love and actually stand by it is really something you dont see everyday. Lovely post
This is an awesome piece of art. Love in different dimensions. I love this Kemi. Good job. God bless your efforts. Awesome!
I always saw love as a feeling i didn’t want to have, but thanks to this master piece I have had a change in heart thank you.
Its beautiful, trust me u might have over heard dis already but I rili mean it. Its so creative nd lovely
This is an amazing piece so real and beautiful ❤️❤️
This is truely an insightful and thought-provoking piece.keep it up.
This feels soo real and strong I learnt that some sacrifices you ask people to make can be very costly
Nice love piece kemi….good job
This has touched me, it has touched my soul, the irony of paying so little attention to the one who matters most to us…truly remarkable. Thank you for this revelation Kemi
“As the blood flowed it was love I saw…”It’s possible to see what you want to see at the expense of others even those you love
Wow it’s nice????
This is just beautiful.. where have you been all my life??? Please write as often as you can
wow! my goodness. i was so touched with the write-up. It was just like the love of Christ for us. keep it up dear one!
Captivating ….just captivating, your ability to make it as captivating as that and yet stay natural and true to yourself is something to applaud
Nice piece, beautifully composed and captivating…sad too. Tried to decipher if it was Jesus or a person that was referred to. But that’s what made it all the more intriguing. Love it!
“You are my heart’s permanent scar”… oh my days!!! Kemi touched my soul… These words are far from inspiring.. they’re alive.
I was really touched after reading,words can’t explain
beautifully and well crafted write up
Beautiful piece. Nigeria could use more amazing writers like you. The sky is just your starting point girl.
Kemi thumbs up!
This piece is one in all.
Bravo
The refusal to back down has me desiring the characters to be reunited. Oh what a loss! Sigh this is nice
Really intriguing. I was really engrossed in the beautiful write up due to the splendid play of words .More power to your elbow
Wow. This was beautifully written. Awesome!
So nice s captivating so alive! I can’t believe the person was dead
Nice piece, keep it up Kemi ??
Wow? I’m honestly blown into the abyss of concious happiness. This made me believe in humanity again. Thank you Kemi . Thank you so much
This made me tear up. This is beautiful!
Beautiful! Absolutely beautiful! ?Great work??
kemi, I must say that you have in few paragraphs given a perfect summary to the story of redemption! YOUR WRITE UP IS NOT THE ONLY BEAUTIFUL, BUT BRILLIANT. Love indeed as your write up portray is not about pleasure but sacrifice! Thank you for your good inspiration, that reminds us that sacrifice is love and is necessary to safe life:
“But I remember when we first met, you forgave me when I hadn’t forgiven myself. You allowed me look you in the face. To all the love you showed me I have been incomplete, unprepared. Undeserving. They said this didn’t exist in our world, in our generation cursed to faults and epidemics and mass funerals. In you I find my peace and my safe place.” Isn’t that a very beautiful part? could anything be more touching and loving than that?
This story/piece is beautifully woven it teaches the masses to have respect for one’s love and not take it for granted. This is a good thing that will help make the world a better place
Wow what a great story beautifully written…so real and brilliant.. I was really touched after reading keep it up kemi
Very good, Kemi. This is quite inspiring. Keep the good work up and keep on rocking. Hoping to read more of your works.
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